I think that your free draft was fantastic. You used amazing vocabulary that really helped me visualize what your main argument was and how all of your claims supported that main argument. You make great use of the three sources that we read and annotated for class, but I think you could possibly use more, or different, quotes to further you claims to support your main argument even better and to make your great paragraphs even better. In your naysayer paragraph, I think that you could think of another potential risk factor as a physical therapist to increase your word count, as you mention was a main issue at the end of your essay, and it would allow you to create a larger connection between your arguments and claims. Overall, you have a very strong essay, and although you have room for improvement, it will be very easy to strengthen your essay.